Needs certain editing on the way through of the structuring of sentences and use of certain words and phrases that can be cut, or a synonym can be found. In addition, the word count needs to be taken into account of the extra parts of the introduction and sources.
Say a little more about personal engagement, how you found out about the film, why you decided to watch his films and more of them.
Change the idea of slavery being a loophole.
Can include more evidence of his critical success and his popular success, more towards the beginning of the script.
Perhaps use more reviews/quotations about his films, and reference them explicitly in the script.
Needs more analysis of the films, mine and reviewers, and use more examples of this.
Perhaps use more of him as a director in his early career, how he got there for example.
Cite and refer to the critics opinions on him.
Need more development of the production slide, choice of subject, methods of working, apply more to the films of Shame and Hunger.
Some good points but could be explored further, particularly the part about freedom and control in Hollywood filmmaking.
More on the Auteur Theory.
Suggest a way you would move the research forward. Use of primary research.
Say a little more about personal engagement, how you found out about the film, why you decided to watch his films and more of them.
Change the idea of slavery being a loophole.
Can include more evidence of his critical success and his popular success, more towards the beginning of the script.
Perhaps use more reviews/quotations about his films, and reference them explicitly in the script.
Needs more analysis of the films, mine and reviewers, and use more examples of this.
Perhaps use more of him as a director in his early career, how he got there for example.
Cite and refer to the critics opinions on him.
Need more development of the production slide, choice of subject, methods of working, apply more to the films of Shame and Hunger.
Some good points but could be explored further, particularly the part about freedom and control in Hollywood filmmaking.
More on the Auteur Theory.
Suggest a way you would move the research forward. Use of primary research.